-A Night With Rush
In 2008 I was lucky enough to get my hands on two tickets for Rush's Snakes and Arrows concert. The show began at 8 pm in the Joe Louis Arena on June 10th. From the moment I stepped on the People Mover and saw the other concert-goers dressed in their vintage Rush memorabilia, I felt like it was the 1980s again. Even though the members of Rush are well into their 50's, they still put on an amazing show. My friend and I were trying to sneak down to better seats for a good portion of the show, and that turned out to be an adventure in itself. Naturally, after the concert my ears were ringing and I couldn't hear properly for about three days. Before leaving the venue I tried to make my way backstage to meet the band, with very little success. Instead, I met a crazed fan who was on the verge of fainting because he managed to steal Neil Peart's drum sticks. It was almost midnight and I was escorted off the premesis by a nice security guard who claimed he "met the guys a while back", but I wasn't too convinced. I made it back to the Joe Louis station just time for the last ride, I hoped over the turnstile and boarded the People Mover. The doors closed, and the night was over.
-My first experience with surgery.
In August of 2009 I had my first gallbladder attack. There is no other way to describe what I felt other than to say it was unbearable, and I thought I was dying. After five hours of waiting in the emergency room and countless tests, I was told I had gallstones due to excessive stress. The only solution was get rid of my gallbladder. Although the doctors assured me it would be a very simple procedure, I was still mildly terrified because I had no family around for support. Later that day the nurse came to prep me for surgery. I called my mom, cried and was rolled down to the OR. I remember waking up hours later in the recovery room with a terrible pain in my throat from the breathing tube. I was offered some ice cream and pain medicine which helped a lot. The next day I went home to begin the recovery process and learn to relax.
I like your first experience with surgery better than your first option. The concert memoir seems more like a list of events that happened that night and doesn't sound too interesting. I would definitely go with the second choice. It sounds like an interesting story, and I also think that you could elaborate on the fact that you had no family around for support to add more feelings for the reader to try to sympathize with. Good luck!
ReplyDeleteI agree with everlasting9290. I think I would wanna hear more about your experience with surgery and with having no family support around. The first sounds fun and interesting too, but after I read both, I asked myself which one I would want to hear more about and I chose the second one.
ReplyDeleteEither of these will work; they are extremely different options, so i guess think about what types of techniques you want to weave into your narrative - satire, humor, description. One might allow you to do more than the other with some of these options.
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